Hi Kristin, Good to see the new work. There are many circles -- the mid-size empty ones seem excessive. What role do they play? The Water Watchers tag line, "have...get..go..see..be" is a string of verbs that don't make sense to me. Whatever words you choose, and I assume your are looking for action words, relate them to water more OR to the sequence of steps that you want the viewer to take if they get involved with the "watching" project. You could invite the viewers .. Want to be a watcher" ie name participants (watchers). Another question: what does the big circle represent? Why use the circular form? Is it a reference to "looking into" something? The forms need justifying in relation to concept. If you are still working with the bubble idea, that seems very tangential. Work on your icons more to make the actions understandable, not too abstract unless each is accompanied by a word (action verb). Keep working.
Hi Kristin,
ReplyDeleteGood to see the new work. There are many circles -- the mid-size empty ones seem excessive. What role do they play? The Water Watchers tag line, "have...get..go..see..be" is a string of verbs that don't make sense to me. Whatever words you choose, and I assume your are looking for action words, relate them to water more OR to the sequence of steps that you want the viewer to take if they get involved with the "watching" project. You could invite the viewers .. Want to be a watcher" ie name participants (watchers).
Another question: what does the big circle represent? Why use the circular form? Is it a reference to "looking into" something? The forms need justifying in relation to concept. If you are still working with the bubble idea, that seems very tangential.
Work on your icons more to make the actions understandable, not too abstract unless each is accompanied by a word (action verb).
Keep working.